A band 6.5 essay
Nowadays, many people argue about whether old buildings should be kept or destroyed and replaced by modern ones. Both sides have their own reasons, which I will discuss in this essay before giving my opinion.
On the one hand, some people believe old buildings should be demolished. The main reason is that they are very old and often not safe. They also use a lot of energy for heating, which is expensive for the owners. Moreover, cities are growing and there is not enough space for housing, so replacing an old building with a modern apartment block can provide homes for many families.
On the other hand, other people think old buildings must be preserved. This is because they are part of the history of a country and they show how people lived in the past. If we destroy them, the young generation will not be able to see their own culture. In addition, tourists come to visit historical places, which brings money to the local economy and creates jobs for local people. Some old buildings are also beautiful, and modern towers built of glass and concrete all look the same in every country.
In my opinion, I believe that old buildings should be preserved as much as possible. Governments should spend money to repair them instead of destroying them, because once a historical building is gone, it can never come back. Of course, if a building is really dangerous, then the government has no choice but to take it down.
In conclusion, although there are some good reasons to demolish old buildings, I think that preserving them is more important for our history and for future generations.
Why it scores what it scores: A competent, safe essay that would land around 6.5. Both views are covered, the paragraphs are organised, and the grammar is largely accurate. What holds it back is that every idea is generic — history, tourists, heating bills — and the linking is signposted rather than argued. The conclusion repeats the introduction instead of resolving anything.