What a 6.5 sounds like
The law I would like to introduce in my country is a law to protect the environment, because pollution is a very serious problem nowadays.
This law would stop factories and cars from polluting the air and the water. Companies would not be allowed to throw their waste into the rivers, and people would be encouraged to use public transport instead of their private cars.
This law is needed because the air quality in our big cities is very bad, especially in winter, and many people have breathing problems, particularly children and old people. Also the rivers are dirty and the fish are dying.
It would be enforced by the government and by the police. There would be big fines for companies that break the rules, and I think this would make them change their behaviour.
I chose this law because I believe the environment is the most important issue for our generation and we must do something before it is too late.
Why it scores what it scores: Fluent, four bullets covered, no grammar to complain about. It sits at 6.5 because the law is the one the plan warns against — a law to protect the environment is a policy area, not a law, so the enforcement bullet has nothing to bite on and produces the government and the police. Broad topics feel safe and give you nothing concrete to say for two minutes.