What a 6.5 sounds like
Nowadays there is a big debate about whether governments should focus on economic development or on protecting the environment. Both opinions have their supporters and in this essay I will discuss both of them.
Firstly, many people believe that economic growth should be the main priority of a government. The reason is that a strong economy creates jobs for the population and gives the state more money, which can be spent on hospitals, schools and roads. This is especially true in developing countries, where a large number of citizens still live in poverty and their main concern is to feed their families. For these people, environmental problems seem less urgent than unemployment.
Secondly, other people argue that protecting the natural world is more important. They point out that pollution causes serious health problems such as asthma and lung cancer, and that climate change is already leading to floods and droughts in many regions, which in the long term will cost the government far more money than it saves today. Furthermore, once a forest is cut down or a species becomes extinct, it is impossible to bring it back, while an economic crisis is only temporary.
In my opinion, both goals are necessary for a country and governments should try to find a balance between them. If they focus only on money, the environment will be destroyed, and if they focus only on nature, people will be poor. Therefore a balance is needed and this is the responsibility of every government.
Why it scores what it scores: A textbook discuss-both-views shape with accurate language and one genuinely good argument (irreversibility versus a temporary downturn). Two things hold it down. The opinion appears only in the conclusion, when the plan asks for it in the introduction as well, and that opinion is the empty balance the tips specifically warn against — it names no mechanism, no priority, and nothing a government could actually do differently on Monday morning.